Analyze the message, identify weaknesses and strengths.

Analyze the message, identify weaknesses and strengths.
Rewrite a corrected message
As an organization, the North American Personal Motorsports
Marketing Association has committed ourselves to helping our
members- a diverse group comprising of dealers of motorcycles,
all-terrain vehicles, Snowmobiles, and personal watercraft –
achieve their business objectives. Consequently, our organization,
which usually goes under the initials NAPMMA, has the following
aims, goals, and objectives. Firstly, we endeavor to aid or assist
our members in reaching their business objectives. Second, NAPMMA
communicates (“lobbying” in slang terms) with local, state, and
national governmental agencies and leaders on issues of importance
to our members. And lastly, we educate the motorsports public, that
being current motorsports vehicle owners, and prospective owners of
said vehicles, on the safe and enjoyable operation of they’re
vehicles.