Analyze the relation of collective and individual experience in Gilgamesh

Analyze the relation of collective and individual experience in Gilgamesh. I attached my corrected essay, to be rewritten for Friday. It is really crucial that you follow the same path that I took and not redo the entire essay, but keeping my trail while correcting my mistakes according to the teacher’s correction, please. Do not remove what I wrote, just arrange/slightly modify it, so that he does not wonder if it was really me who did it. Thank you very much. Keep my english level, even if you integrate some small errors, for credibility. I would ideally like to be worse a B+,A-.