Travel, living, or working experiences in your own or other communities (500 words limit)

Travel, living, or working experiences in your own or other communities (500 words limit)

I have a draft.  it is still rough.  I don’t like the conclusion.  I think it is abrupt. Maybe I want to briefly add a particular touching incident or perhaps a memorable request for a bouquet or a moment that especially touched my heart.  But, I don’t know how to write it.  Also, I am not sure if the essay is well developed to lead to a conclusion.
It definitely needs development, especially one or two paragraphs before the conclusion paragraph.

The essay has 500 words limit.  I have around 400 words in the draft.

Thank you for your help.