ENG-106 Peer Review Worksheet: Proposal Essay

Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. To highlight the text and type over the information in the boxes on this worksheet, double-click on the first word.

Name of the draft’s author: Type Author Name Here

Name of the peer reviewer: Type Reviewer Name Here

Reviewer

After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric.

Type 3-5 Sentence Summary Here

 

 

After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet.

Proposal Content and Ideas

· How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make in this proposal?

Type Answer Here

· How successfully does the paper focus on presenting a well-reasoned proposal?

Type Answer Here

· How persuasively is evidence used to justify ideas and enrich the essay?

Type Answer Here

· How effectively does the essay incorporate strategies that support proposals (e.g., categorical, resemblance, ethical claims, and cause and effect claims)?

Type Answer Here

Organization

· How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper?

Type Answer Here

· Please identify the writer’s thesis and quote it in the box below.

Type Writer’s Thesis Here

· How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay’s ideas?

Type Answer Here

· How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay?

Type Answer Here

 

 

Format

· How closely does the paper follow APA formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1″ margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with student’s name, date, course, and instructor’s name)?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

· Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical APA format?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

· Are all sources listed on the references page in APA format?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

· Is the required minimum number of sources listed?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

Language Use and Style

· Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If “No,” please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice and tone.

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

· How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing?

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· How would you assess the writer’s diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

 

Grammar and Mechanics

· Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction.

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

· Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement.

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

 

 

Three things that I liked about your draft are:

1. Type First Thing You Liked

2. Type Second Thing You Liked

3. Type Third Thing You Liked

 

Three things that could be improved are:

1. Type 1st Area for Improvement

2. Type 2nd Area for Improvement

3. Type 3rd Area for Improvement

Chapter 2 Scenario: Akira’s Recent Behavior Changes

To develop and evaluate an intervention plan that addresses the changes in Akira’s behavior.

Akira, age 3, always arrived at school with a broad smile and an eagerness to begin playing. However, for the past week he has been arriving in a tearful state almost every morning. He says “that nothing is wrong” when asked why he is crying. As Akira’s teacher, you record your observations on the daily attendance form.
Recently, you have also noted that Akira has shown little interest in any art activities. This was always one of his favorite things to do but now he seems to spend more time alone in the book corner. In addition, the slightest negative comment or request often causes Akira to become angry and to overreact. He has also become aggressive (e.g., hitting, pushing, and taking away toys) toward the other children, which is not characteristic for Akira. You are deeply concerned and determined to learn what circumstances may be causing these troubling behaviors, so you begin to formulate a plan.

Focus Assignment

1. Complete the first step of your plan by briefly identifying behaviors that are uncharacteristic for Akira and describing why these are problematic. Outline the steps you would take to determine what may be causing or contributing to Akira’s recent behavioral changes. In addition, briefly discuss what effect these negative behaviors could have on his developmental and learning processes.
2. Be sure to read the REFLECTION section below to guide your thinking. Write your refection response after you have completed your plan.

Self-Evaluation

1. For each item on your intervention plan:
a. Explain how this item relates to issues in the scenario.

2. Describe and justify how your intervention plan will improve teaching and learning in the scenario.